Friday, March 18, 2011
draft 1 Fast Day 198 March 18 2011 (Questions from an ICU Kid...)
Questions From A Kid in the ICU on Valentine's Day
"Father, why did God give us eyes?"
strewn like a quilt across her bed
were crayon'd classmates' Valentines;
his arm asleep beneath her head,
while monitoring vital signs.
He said, "So we can color and can play!
Go to gramma's on Summer Lake,
where we can see the Milky Way!
And count candles on your birthday cake!
Even though we stay outside...
allergies and gramma's dogs..." he sighed.
(O, Crayon robins! Paint carnations!
Color candle-songs with long wicks!
People... peonies of all nations!
Father's love bright pigments mix!)
"Daddy, I don't know exactly why...
God gave us eyes so we can cry."
final draft: http://peace-weaving.blogspot.com/2011/03/draft-2-day-198-questions-from-kid-in.html
I do not know about this. It takes me a day or two of vacation away from being focused before I can read something again. It was very tricky not to make it sound like something maudlin, like some of Thomas Hardy's ironic poems... he has one I have in mind which is a caution I try to stay away from. I still like Hardy.